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Attached is a draft of my commentary on ADHD. Please revise this draft based on my instructor’s feedback. The feedback is listed below.

Instructors Comments:Thank you for your rough draft! Don’t use section headers (intro, concl) So what’s your point? Surely ADHD has always impacted kids’ schooling, so what is different recently? Your paper starts off like an expository paper that simply explains how the condition affects kids, but what’s the trend, and what judgement do you want to pass – what do you want to argue? What’s your takeaway for readers? You have a source cited in your References (Mash and Wolfe) that does not appear in-text . . . this is a problem; you’re either not citing properly or not using that source.

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